So well done! I love the Alex POV. It adds such suspense to the story. And this:
Sometimes he thinks the memory of how he lost his eye is wrong because it doesn’t feel right to him. If anything, it feels like that memory belongs to someone else. Then he remembers the smell of spilled wine tied closely to the memory of pain and he knows he’s lying to himself.
...is brilliant. What a great way to let the reader in on what's going on, without giving away too much. Thanks for writing this for the ficathon.
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Sometimes he thinks the memory of how he lost his eye is wrong because it doesn’t feel right to him. If anything, it feels like that memory belongs to someone else. Then he remembers the smell of spilled wine tied closely to the memory of pain and he knows he’s lying to himself.
...is brilliant. What a great way to let the reader in on what's going on, without giving away too much. Thanks for writing this for the ficathon.