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ext_15169 ([identity profile] speakr2customrs.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] liz_marcs 2006-08-26 09:51 am (UTC)

Enjoyable chapter, but I'm afraid that I felt that it was a little bit of a shaggy dog story in parts. Xander went on far too long about the running away plot for my taste and her suggestion was far too logical for there ever to be any doubt that the very practical and pragmatic Xander would accept it.

I spotted several typos of the 'missing word' variety.

“The point I’m trying to make is that when I first saw you, I thought you were trying pass.”

Shouldn't it be "trying to pass."?


the Scooby part of my life interfered the normal part

Should say interfered with the normal part.

“An octopus is very sneaky. I saw it on one of Sir Attenborough’s nature documentaries,”

Either this is a major typo or a major Americanism. Nobody English would ever refer to 'Sir Attenborough' under any circumstances. We might call him 'Sir David Attenborough' if we wanted to be formal but in normal conversation we just say 'David Attenborough'.

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